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One day, Death decided to leave us. And he took all the children with him. We didn't know why.

He just left us a note, saying:

Dear People,

I have left,
And I have taken the children with me.

                                           Signed,
                                           Death

At first, we didn't really know how to react, so we merely exchanged confused glances. Some people might have cried.

Then someone spoke up and said, "Don't you see? This is a good thing! Without Death and children, we are free!"

And we all raised our hands in the air and chorused words of agreement.

It was the greatest of blessings.

Without death, we didn't need medicines or exercise or broccoli. Without death, we trespassed on private property, ate all the pork we wanted to and even shot each other just for fun. We didn't need doctors or politicians or priests.  We didn't have to go to church because we weren't going to end up in hell anyway.

We didn't have to take care of the world because we were always told to make it a better place for our children. But now there was no one to make it a better place for. So we polluted the rivers and turned forests into racetracks.

We also didn't need to worry about sexually transmitted diseases and unwanted pregnancies anymore so we had sex with anyone, beautiful or ugly, anorexic or obese, man or woman. Everybody did it with everybody. We did it on streets, in video rental shops, or in the middle of the town square. We did it in twos, in threes and in fifties.

Yes, we were swimming in sweet, sweet pleasure.

But one day something dreadful happened.

Great balls of fire descended from the sky. Gigantic they were, big enough to destroy a cluster of buildings. We ran and we ran, but we could not escape. The fire struck us all.

They burnt us, and it was just so painful. We could all feel the flames penetrating our skin, but no matter how much it hurt and how much we wanted it to end, we just kept writhing in agony.

So we waited.

We waited for the pain to stop.

We waited for the firestorm to die down.

And we are still waiting for Death to come back.
Seemed like a funny idea.
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BurningQuill Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Student Writer
This is great absurdity. I love it.
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Gricken Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. :bow:
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Wonderwall33 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2011
I loved this. The idea of death leaving is an awesome one and I think an idea that we all kind of muse over but the truth, like your story shows, is that sometimes death is exactly what we need. Very nice job.
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Gricken Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :la:
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TheJadester Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011
Totally made me think of the Rapture.
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Gricken Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, the Rapture. This was somewhat inspired by the Rapture. :meow: And all that talk about the world ending in fire. :onfire:
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TheJadester Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011
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Kira73 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
This piece has been featured here --> [link]

:heart: KM
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Gricken Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! :hug:
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Kira73 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Very welcome. :hug:
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YS-Liliumsynth Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010   Writer
makes sense enough, glad to know there's still people who thinks like this in this sinful, broken world.:mwahaha:
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Gricken Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :lol: Yes, it is a sinful world, isn't it?
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YS-Liliumsynth Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2011   Writer
yep, sinful is still an understatement ya know.:shrug:

:mwahaha: wait til you hear this sinful world where the pope himself is the underling of Satan... :mwahaha:

lulz, nevermind what I said.:XD:
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Gricken Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Too late. You already said it. :noes:
Doesn't bother me though; I've never been much of a Catholic. <_<
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YS-Liliumsynth Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2011   Writer
hehe eh well... :mwahaha:
wala lang, juz wanna say that, ti's been up in my head for sometime.^^

yep, not a Catholic, even I can say so for myself, but well uh...how should I put it, lahat ng tao, damay when that happens.:nod: ^^

anywayz, well no need to worry about these things...now.^^ :nod:
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clrzia Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
this is amazing :D ... without death,...no more broccoli! yay!
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Gricken Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Yippee! :icondummydanceplz: Thank you very much!
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clrzia Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
youre welcome :)
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neurotype Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Interesting...I love the last line. (Perhaps more interesting that you called this humor ;)

I'm wondering if you intended to make their "punishment" supernatural as well--I was expecting a natural or manmade disaster to make them realize they needed death.
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Gricken Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. :D

I got the idea from a documentary that explained that a sun storm is going to hit the earth in 2012. According to them, these storms really do happen every couple of years, but now, our ozone layer isn't strong enough to shield us. In a way, I guess it could also be considered a man-made disaster. I just didn't indicate it in the story though. You could say it's sort of my secret meaning. :shrug:
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neurotype Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Huh...interesting stuff :O I wouldn't mind an explanation for my own interest, but yeah--it doesn't quite go with the rest of the story.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow.

I was going to say that you've got the perfect solution to immortality there without the world still growing, if you get what I mean.

I really like the twist at the end and how it's filled with... horror, almost, because it's never-ending, and that is the most cruel thing about it, not to die, but to live...

That's how I feel when I read this piece.

You are a great writer. I feel as if this is a fantastically written piece. :clap:
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Gricken Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Awww :aww: Thank you so much! :hug: Your words mean a lot.

Yes, I guess living forever is much more of a horror than death is.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I wouldn't mind it, personally. :D
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EmmyIsAZebra Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow, haha it was funny but that last line was kind of deep too. :giggle: I'm really loving your work! :love:
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Gricken Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :hug: I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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EmmyIsAZebra Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure! :tighthug:
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Tariray Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This is epic - and i can so see Death doing that a la Terry Pratchett style.

last line though - we wait? it seems incongrous to the other final lines - should it be waited? unless of course it is intentionally incongrous -
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Gricken Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooh thanks. :D Yeah, I did that on purpose. Kind of wanted to emphasize that they are still waiting. Maybe I should just go right ahead and change it into "we are still waiting" :hmm:
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Tariray Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
hmm that sounds better - gives a better visual.
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Gricken Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
It does, doesn't it? :D Thanks for mentioning it.
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Longdragon92 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010
All time favorite line "Without death, we didn't need medicines or exercise or broccoli." XD
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Gricken Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Hahah.:D I love that line too.
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Longdragon92 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010
sheer genius :hug:
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Gricken Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww :aww: I wouldn't go as far as that, but thanks.
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Longdragon92 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010
You're welcome
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copper-icarus Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010   Writer
High five!
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Gricken Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :highfive:
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celestial-elevator Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
Interesting read. I guess Death is necessary after all, eh? :P
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Gricken Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. I guess you can say that. :D We need Death... and children.
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celestial-elevator Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010
Children too :D
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Isiri-Blackthorn Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
It is both funny and horrible at the same time! I enjoyed it!
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Gricken Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! :hug:
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Isiri-Blackthorn Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome!
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